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Uzumaki Kite
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| Subject: Oshi Clan FINISHED Sat Jul 27, 2013 8:54 pm | |
| Clan Name: Oshi Bloodline Name: Juumoku Bloodline Ability: Telekinesis Location: Scattered Clan History: This clan is only a few generations old, but in that time, they managed to spread. The founder of the clan was the first to gain their kekkeigenkai, and with it's power, he quickly plowed his way across the map, leaving a wake of fallen enemies and toppled queens behind him. His direct descendants were all seen to also posess his same, strange doujutsu. Most of them were outcasts, as the instability and unreliable nature of the jutsu itself proved to be the downfall of anyone who tried to use it. Mental health was often a problem in members of the clan, but there were a few who managed to cope with the stress. Clan traits: Members if the clan often are born with red eyes, but this is not always the case. The symbol of the clan is also something that is displayed on attire worn by Oshi. Clan Weaknesses: Their particular doujutsu comes with quite a few drawbacks. Continued use in a short period of time can lead to doubled vision, and the stress put on the eyes and mind can lead to splitting headaches. Once a member uses the final stage in their doujutsu's power more than five times within a time period of one week IRL, the doubled vision would be so bad that their focus could only be put on a single image, splitting the focus and dividing the power of their telekinesis in half, making the D rank useless, the B rank as strong as the D rank, and the S rank as strong as the B rank, but they keep their drawbacks. This effect takes three days IRL during which time there can be no usage of the doujutsu, or else the eyes will not heal, and the timer will be reset. If a member of the Oshi clan has been pushed to the point where he uses his doujutsu three times regardless of the fact that it's power had been lowered, they will lose sight in one of their eyes, making it useless and permanently halving their doujutsu's power. The doujutsu itself's main weakness is that it's power cannot affect a RPC directly. Requirements: Born into the clan with pure Oshi blood. Members Unknown Exactly Jutsu- D-RANK TECHNIQUES:
Name: Level One Telekinesis Canon/Custom: Custom Type: Doujutsu Jutsu Prerequisites: Oshi clan member Description: The first level of the Oshi's doujutsu. While only using this much power, their telekinesis is at it's weakest. The edges of their iris seems to ignite and form a yellow border between it and the sclera. Inside of his field of vision, objects within ten meters of him, and are within his line of sight, form a similar yellow outline around them, but this is only apparent to the user of the technique. The maximum amount of weight that can be supported is equal to 75kilos, and a cooldown of one post must be waited through before being able to use it again.
- B-RANK TECHNIQUES:
Name: Level Two Telekinesis Canon/Custom: Custom Type: Doujutsu Jutsu Prerequisites: Oshi clan member Description: The first level of the Oshi's doujutsu. While using this much power, their telekinesis is at it's highest for the average members of the clan. The edges of their iris seems to ignite and form a yellow border between it and the sclera, and then the glow rips and tears through the iris as if it were spreading towards the pupil. Inside of his field of vision, objects within fifty meters of him, and are within his line of sight, form a similar yellow outline around them, but this is only apparent to the user of the technique. The maximum amount of weight that can be supported is equal to 200kilos, and a cooldown of three posts must be waited through before being able to use it again.
- S-RANK TECHNIQUES:
Name: Level Three Telekinesis Canon/Custom: Custom Type: Doujutsu Jutsu Prerequisites: Oshi clan member Description: The first level of the Oshi's doujutsu. While using the maximum amount of power their clan has to offer, their telekinesis is at a point where only legends have reached. The edges of their iris seems to ignite and form a yellow border between it and the sclera, and then the glow rips and tears through the iris as if it were spreading towards the pupil until it completely consumes the color of his eye. Inside of his field of vision, objects within 100 meters of him, and are within his line of sight, form a similar yellow outline around them, but this is only apparent to the user of the technique. The maximum amount of weight that can be supported is equal to 500kilos, and a cooldown of seven posts must be waited through before being able to use it again.
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| | | Hirano Arumi Moderator
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| Subject: Re: Oshi Clan FINISHED Tue Jul 30, 2013 4:45 am | |
| - 75 kilos seems a bit much for D-rank, maybe a little lower.
- Being able to use telekinesis on something that someone else is holding or wearing could be a problem rulewise, maybe have a note that it doesn't work on something somebody is directly touching.
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| | | Kenji Jinsei
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| Subject: Re: Oshi Clan FINISHED Tue Jul 30, 2013 5:12 am | |
| In addition to what Hira stated I would like to clarify a few things.
- When you say "final stage" in "Once a member uses the final stage in their doujutsu's power more than five times within a time period of one week IRL..." are you referring to the S-Rank version of telekinesis or the telekinesis in general? If the S-Rank version you would need to change it to add that the lower ranks also contribute, which would be easiest to do in a point system where each rank causes an X amount of deterioration and once a threshold is crossed it triggers the halving weakness. If the telekinesis in general then what you have is fine, but I would remove "the final stage in" in order to avoid confusion, as you do not have previous non-telekinetic stages of which to speak of.
- Regarding what you mention in the sentence "This effect takes three days IRL during which time there can be no usage of the doujutsu, or else the eyes will not heal, and the timer will be reset." I assume you mean that if you use the dojutsu within those three days it resets the timer and the eyes will remain in their current state. It's just that one could read it and assume that you mean the eyes will permanently set, which would mean that the halving would permanently set and rendering the timer reset pointless to mention.
- I would also suggest mentioning the different ranks share a cool down period since being able to use all three one after the other would be a bit op. So if you use the B-Rank version you would need to wait three posts before you could use any version at all again.
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